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Jennifer Mckinnish's avatar

I had no idea about any of this I appreciate the knowledge

Matthew V. Milone's avatar

I'm inclined to agree with this essay, but I had a lot of trouble understanding it.

There were many cases in which I couldn't tell what a given phrase referred to or how one point related to the previous one. Altogether, the writings’ lack of flow or context reminds me of personal notes, not a persuasive essay.

I hope this is perceived as constructive criticism. Your work seems important, so I hope that you're able to convey it as effectively as possible.

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